So, I've posted this song already, but I just re-tracked the vocals and did a new mix and think it sounds way better (not perfect yet, but I'll probably be re-mixing everything for the album once I've got everything done). Let me know what you think!
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Best mix yet
way to much reverb on the vocals though.
One thing about every version of this song I've heard is that despite the composition and note choice being good the chorus is weak. In my opinion you need to beef it up with a little electric guitar and get a little grit on your vocals. I think it would do wonders for the variety within the song.
Just my opinion though, I have to say you choose notes very well in a pop context .